Inter school soccer
18.6.2021
RT:Use precise vocabulary
NL:To be descriptive when telling
Audience:Kaylan, Isabella, Mum, Dad,
Purpose:Discribe your feelings
We were just hoping on the bus...the wind slowly disappeared as I got further in the bus. I was scared but also realy, realy exited! This was it...I was here now, I couldn’t turn back! The bus has already driven of. My heart was beating madly. I was so happy that totay was finally here! I couldn’t believe my eyes as I glazed out the window, I saw Bushes disappear and a dark blue concrete thing apere. I know this is it, the bus stops, the doors open, I am here, finally. My heart jumps out of my chest* as I hop out of the bus. I’m scared and also exited!!!
-By Olive =)
Nice describing!-khwan🏳️🌈
ReplyDeleteHi Olive,
ReplyDeleteits Brooklyn and something i liked about your writing is how you were hoping onto the bus and how you described how you were feeling when you were there and when you were on the bus.